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Gary L Taylor's avatar

Another excellent October tale. Kept me reading to the end, though I also needed to stop and scratch at my arms at points.

Karen Kapell's avatar

“I did neither. I sat in the dirt beneath the red moon and watched. The ground opened. The marked poured into it like water down a drain.”

To me, this is the mystery. When everyone is either marching into the void singing, or ripping themselves apart to avoid it, you simply sit, wait and watch? True, the lesson later learned says no one is spared the awful realization—yet composure in the face of everything observed remains unexplained. I speculate there was more than one, quietly waiting and watching. Perhaps even celebrating with the others who seemed to have gamed the system—until it became clear that they had not. The story as written is horrifically scary. Horrifying. To me, you, as always, display amazing writing talent. But my brain got caught on that one niggling detail and refuses to let it go. Just saying: I hate when that happens!

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